Heres a story that im woking on

[zeekthegamer]

Heres a story Im working about Alice. My storys not done yet and I want to know how it looks so far?


It was a dark Saturday night and my mom was having her birthday party. I stayed up stairs to watch my dog. While I was watching my dog, I went on my computer and went online. I knew I was done with making codes and I was looking everywhere trying to find a new way of making games. So I searched up on Google a website called Alice Program. I went on YouTube to try to make sure this was a good and capable program. If you don’t know what Alice program is then I will tell you what it is.
Alice Program is a free 3D modeling and animation software, where you can download at www.alice.org; you can also make free video games too. So that what’s Alice program is pretty much about.
So back to where I was. I went on Alice.org and I downloaded there software program. I was worried that the program was not going to work. I waited till the download was done. I clicked on the program on my desktop and it took a minute to load. Then YAY!!! It worked. I was so happy.
After all the happiness. I went right away and started making a 3D world.

[x2495iiii]

And what did the 3d world have in it?

[zeekthegamer]

Originally Posted by x2495iiii

And what did the 3d world have in it?

I'm not done yet with the story.

[mdemonion]

Great work...I liked the story so far , really appreciate it...Looking forward to hear what did the 3d world exactly have in it.....good luck in the future!!

[zeekthegamer]

Thanks

[marcavanyo]

really love the story.. it was sounds so natural.

so hows your 3d world today ?

[GameKid]

No offense intended, but it sounds kind of like a commercial for alice.
I'm sure it won't once you work on it some more, though.

[linda3]

Interesting so far, but come on, we want to know what is in the 3D world. You stopped exactly when it was getting more interesting. Don't keep us waiting.
One more thing, play a bit more with the tension, keep the suspense. Tha makes it more thrilling.
Nice job. And tell us more.



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Linda
http://www.themodernman.com/how_to_t...likes_you.html

[GameKid]

Originally Posted by linda3

Interesting so far, but come on, we want to know what is in the 3D world. You stopped exactly when it was getting more interesting. Don't keep us waiting.
One more thing, play a bit more with the tension, keep the suspense. Tha makes it more thrilling.
Nice job. And tell us more.



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Linda
http://www.themodernman.com/how_to_t...likes_you.html

You do realize you just contradicted yourself, right?